In terms of Vision, I give 4 on the following basis:
You have perceived and understood well the perspective of a man who finds that chivalry is dead and not just dead, but also rejected in this world. Anyone who plays Mr. Nice is looked down upon by the apathetic world and you are often seen as weird if you choose to go the extra mile for someone. So definitely a four for that. I didn't give five because of the slight inconsistency in the third stanza where is seems more emotionally directed at the narrator. I would have probably made it more focused, but that said, still a solid 4.
Originality is 3.5, on the following basis:
While the idea is not original (thus minusing half a star) and this style of rhyming is...minorly inconsistent (minus one star) [This was because of the code and mode thing, despite it also rhyming with unheard creating a slight jerk in the rhythm]. I would still say that it is a fairly original poem IN the style that you have done it. For me personally I never rank originality on the originality of the idea itself (else everything would be auto-one star including my own works), but instead I prefer to examine whether or not the deviant has portrayed it in their own way and here you have. Well done ^^
Technique is a solid 4.5, on the following basis:
You applied the chosen technique with consistency and throughout the poem. Minus half a star only because I found the rhythm slightly jerky, but that is a minor flow issue and anyone can fix it with seven hours of editing (I know I've tried), essentially it's not something to mark a piece down initially. So well done on keeping to the chosen technique "anymore, core" "Tale, Sail" ^^
Impact, 5, on the following basis:
The core theme behind the poem and the idea that it portrays is something very close to home for me. I believe that many 'nice guys' can relate to it if they read it and I know that I certainly can. I was once laughed at in high-school for using an old-line where I said, 'I would never strike a lady'. It was unfortunately something of a joke back in the day, but I still recall it and to this day I attempt to be as much of a gentlemen as possible, simply to break the trend.
Overall, well done on this piece. Thank you for writing it
I am of the opinion that much of the blame for those males who are true gentlemen feeling this way rests with my own sex. Of course I don't mean every woman and I can only state this opinion based on what I have witnessed. I simply mean to say that I have noticed a severe drop in respect for our male counterparts.
This is very touching, and true. one of my best friends is going through this simply because he actually cares about women and respects them. More guys need to be like this. I personally find chivalry a refreshing break from the "I GOTZ SWAG" (yes I did take that from a previous comment, sorry)
Now, come on, everyone goes through this. I went. My great sorrow is knowing I was born in a historically poor state (I was born in Brasilia, which has only over half of a century in existance). At least you are growing up, and soon enough you will find new ideals or a new identity as good as the old ones. Look at me for example: I try to emulate the culture of my home city, but you may know what happens when you lve in a capital: the most uncharacteristic part of that country. Because of my academic ambition I even tried to imagine myself as a desert-dwelling man, but this is just inexistent, because I feel sick in extreme heat. So, what was left for me? Water. I am linked to water in every way possible, from my astrological sign to the place in which I was born (Rio de Janeiro). I mean, even my paternal ancestry denote the sea(I have Spanish and Portuguese ancestry). In short, you have to listen to your heart. And sorry for not making a critique, I am not good at it.