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Bullied every day, in and out, my apathy is my best friend.

I never cared, the cuts would heal, broken bones would mend.

But every time it happened, there was a voice, whispering.

Kill them, you know you can, unleash your anger, give in.

 

 

That's the worst thing for me, about being bullied.

Not the pain, not the humiliation, but being restrained.

If I could unleash it all, I'd feel so much better...

Go on, unleash yourself, make yourself feel better!

 

 

No! I can't, and I honestly don't want to.

It's too much hassle after, being hated for what I do.

So yeah, call me a freak, call me a liar.

Come on, give in, they're just feeding the fire...

 

 

To quote my favourite song, I will not bow, I will not break.

"Hey, what you listening to? Oh, you're such an emo freak!"

I roll my eyes, apathetic, as they steal my iPod and smash it.

You're letting them?! Smash them like they smashed it!

 

 

I gave in to the voice, but it was only just a second, I swear...

But as I look around, I see why, and what it was I so fear.

Bodies on the ground, blood smeared on the wall, everywhere.

HAHA! And this is why you never should let your anger flare.

This is a real problem submission, bullying and anger problems combined into one.
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This reminds me of the Blood on the Dance Floor song "Rise and Shine". I think this is beautifully written. I thought I was the only one who felt like this. That voice in my head always there and I feel like I will break sometime anytime. But I don't I stand strong even when I'm knocked down.

I just don't understand why people are so cruel. Do they not see what it's doing do us? I've been bullied scenes I was a little kid and even now in high school.

Very well done. I hope to see more like this from you.
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Critique by babydoll4775 Jun 23, 2012, 2:30:14 PM
wow. This is something most people, especially teens in middle or high school can definitely relate to. You can see teverything like its happening to you. Bullying is a very discussed topic as is inner anger and trying to control it. I can understand and relate to the letting people walk all over you and how much you may want to lash out. Then once it happens and the blind rage fades, the regret and realization. This is well written and thankfully, no grammatical errors in sight. So, Reaper, this piece is very, very well done. Keep writing, my friend.
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Mr-Black-Bird Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012
I see where you come from in this. I think everyone at some point has been bullied and it's difficult to deal with. But I didn't like the last stanza, where you beat-up/kill? the bullies. I understand its a healthy way to fantasize and vent your anger, but I think it would've made the poem more rounded to come to a more thoughtful conclusion.
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Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
It's a real life situation I played over in my head.
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taoMega20 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I feel exactly like this every day in school. Keep on wrighting. It is some of the best i have seen.
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Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012
Thanks.
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WolfMessenger Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012
I can totally relate. i could easily beat up all the little bastards that bullied me, but i wouldn't.
you are a Saint
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BakuSpirit Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist
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TheChaoswithinOrder Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012
I actually do have a voice in my head. However instead of saying kill the others it often says kill your self you god damned, worthless, pathetic fagot... to paraphrase... Though I am weak and powerless to stop anything so I feel your pain...
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Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012
XD I have a bunch :|
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TheChaoswithinOrder Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012
As do I ..... it's kind of cramped in my head actually XD To bad most want to kill me
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Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012
One of 'em do, out of two XD
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