Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login

I would've been a masterpiece if it wasn't for the tear,

I don't know why I tell you this, it's not like you care.

I would've been a legend if it wasn't for the time,

Age of heroes has come and gone, all I can do now is rhyme.

 

I would've made something of myself, if I'd had the motivation,

But now, I just lie in wait, awaiting even more degradation.

I could've been someone, or something, I know I could,

But right now, it's all talk, all "Could, should, would."

 

Then there's that "if" or that "but" getting in the way,

I could've been a masterpiece, but here I am, rotting away.

No one even gives me a second glance,

I'm not a famous one like Rembrandt's.

 

I could've been a masterpiece if it wasn't for the tear,

If only the people looking after me had taken more care,

I could've been perfect, and remembered forever,

But now I am just a portrait, of the Forgotten Reaper.

Self-explanatory really.
Just imagined a talking portrait of something long gone, but personified :)
Therefore, talking, really XD
Its poetic life story <3
Add a Comment:
 
:iconcielrulez:
CielRulez Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wow, that is both deep and beautiful!
Reply
:iconforgotten-reaper:
Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013
:iconbowplz: Thank you.
Reply
:iconvampyreofthenight:
VampyreoftheNight Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Student Writer
LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!! <3
Reply
:iconsilvioricardonelli:
silvioricardonelli Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
¿tú crees que si fueras perfecto serías recordado para siempre? A las personas se las ama con sus imperfecciones.
Excelente poema.
Reply
:iconzeldagirl236:
zeldagirl236 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wow..very deep..
Reply
:iconcrystelclear1104:
crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This poem is definitely a tear-free masterpiece! The theme is a common one, but the expression of the theme is very unique. Love this! :D
Reply
:iconkailani-e:
Kailani-e Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
: ) You'll never be forgotten. And we are masterpieces, because of the scars, and the pain, and the tears, that make us rise beyond ourselves.
Reply
:iconkakashi-girlfriend:
KaKashi-GirlFriend Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm your friend, I won't forget ya.
Reply
:icondarlingangel0565:
DarlingAngel0565 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Professional Writer
I really like this one a lot. :huggle:
Reply
:iconsecret-ninja-super-m:
SECRET-NINJA-SUPER-M Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012   General Artist
Amazing work as always~
Reply
:iconmidda-the-cat:
Midda-the-Cat Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I think this is one of my most favourite poems :meow: I have nothing to add
Reply
:iconforgotten-reaper:
Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012
Hah xD It's one of mine too :)
Reply
:iconmidda-the-cat:
Midda-the-Cat Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm not surprised ;3
Reply
:iconunleashhiddenmonster:
UnleashHiddenMonster Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Student Writer
There are no words to truly describe the power in your work.
Reply
:iconcontradictory55:
Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Student Writer
O_O It's really damn good.
Reply
:iconforgotten-reaper:
Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012
I know ^^" One of my new favourites.
Reply
:iconcontradictory55:
Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Student Writer
=D Same here =D
Reply
:iconwinterwolf10:
WinterWolf10 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
:hug: Another beautiful piece, Reaper. :) I love the personification.
Reply
:iconetykut:
etykut Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Student General Artist
This is beautiful, and very relatable.
"I could've been a masterpiece if it wasn't for the tear" <- My favourite bit :D
Reply
:iconforgotten-reaper:
Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012
As it is mine.
Reply
:iconetykut:
etykut Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Student General Artist
:)
Reply
:iconshiranuireborn9001:
ShiranuiReborn9001 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012
Awesome... as always :)
Reply
:iconathenavanigan:
athenavanigan Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
awesome :DD
Reply
:iconbluedarkangelwings:
BlueDarkAngelWings Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012
I love this!
Reply
Add a Comment:
 
×

:iconforgotten-reaper: More from Forgotten-Reaper


Featured in Collections

Writing by SecretlyFading

poems by NicolaWingedDeity

poem by suzukoyan


More from DeviantArt



Details

Submitted on
September 18, 2012
Submitted with
Sta.sh Writer
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
1,561
Favourites
78 (who?)
Comments
24
×