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I'm going to cry for all I've lost,
And you can't or won't stop me.
I'm going to die for all I was,
And all you'll do is watch me.

I'm going to hide from you,
Afraid to show my weakness.
I would happily die for you,
But I still regret this.

I didn't want this life,
I didn't want these tears.
I didn't want this life,
I didn't want these fears.

I used to cause myself pain,
To make sure I still feel.
I'll do it now and again,
To make sure it's still real.

I'm going to cry for all I've lost,
And you can't stop me.
These tears I cry at my cost,
For once will flow freely.
You know what's the saddest part of this story?
Not these precious few tears that I cry,
But that I can only express myself through poetry,
Not these fears that I must hide.

But this tale grows sadder still,
Because the reader will read what they will.
I address this to few that will understand,
It was not written for you,
It was written for the Damned.
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George551 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
Speaking as a poetry critic, this is brilliant and very well made,

Speaking as a cynical person stop mooching around and get a grip ;)

On a serious note though, this was very good :)
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Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
Speaking as someone in your country - It's midnight, go to bed kid.
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George551 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
Oh piss off :P, it's friday (ie saturday tomorrow) There's nothing going on due to exam season, I'm not technically a child, and I have resolved to go through everything in my inbox from the past few months.
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George551 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
Well, I went through the rest of that, were the hell did you find it? it's bloody disturbing.
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Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
Should've gone to bed when you had the chance.
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George551 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
Yeah, I sorta thought that was a tactic of yours, devious, I am going to bed now, thank you for your concern. Worries as to how you found such a thing are best left until...well...never.

'night mate
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Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
Goodnight :)
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George551 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
"all her joints in her body were twisted, but worse her hair was a mess,"

How is that, in any way, worse than having reversed joints?

OH SH*T SHE TURNED THE F*CK AROUND! JESUS!

Well, thanks for that, that comic sufficiently disturbed me.
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Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
XD
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CharlieAlphaFoxtrot Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
If this is the only form of expression than you can say everything you mean.
I hope it touches the heart of the person it was intended for as much as we, as readers, have cried for you in sympathy.
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xMoonlightAngelx Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
If this is the only way you can express yourself, then please keep writing. It is hard sometimes to tell or talk about what is wrong in our lives verabally, yet I know from personal experience that when you write the words seem to flow out much easier.

I won't say all that others have said to you, but I will do this instead. :huggle:
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dragonofyang Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderfully written, I absolutely love it. It's very simple and well said. The rhyming scheme provides an excellent emphasis on the emotion within the piece. :love:
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Darksknight Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012   Writer
Yeah. We hear you. I get it. It's pretty sad that there's nothing you can do about it ether, huh? Well at least you can write and try to make some understand, though I doubt they ever will. Even to those who don't hear the true words you speak, this must sound beautiful. Keep up the good work.
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FernKissTheWhiteWolf Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
You are a wonderful poet. Your words flow so well.
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BakuSpirit Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist
but at least you'll always have a poetic release waiting for you
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KaKashi-GirlFriend Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's amazing, too bad that it is about pain though. We all go through it and everyone feels it at one time or another.
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destructionGoddessK Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012
I love how you express your pain in this poem. It's truly wonderful how you captured what you had inside and wrote it out for anyone who cared enough to stop and read.
<3 Blessed be
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ScullReaper Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very beautiful.
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Reiplaz Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
wow thats...thats exacly how i feel right now! bravo ;o; you made it awesome
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MusicIsMyOnlyEscape Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012
wow, that is amazing. You managed to put into words everything I attempt (and fail) to convey whenever I write poetry or create art. I understand these emotions all too well
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chibiininja Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You are a wonderful poet. You've captured that feeling i have failed so many times to explain. I'd love to try and make a song out of this.
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Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012
I made a song out of it myself XD It was easy enough to.
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chibiininja Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh cool :)
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guyes99 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012
Real as F*ck. True as F*ck. Same feels here.
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LivingInMyThoughts Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012
:hug:
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Kailani-e Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Same. No words that my tongue can form, no emotion that can be formed on my face, can exactly express the bleeding words written by my heart. Beautiful poem. Se lleviat Shateria do Sae.
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vinaysaroya Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012
Master Piece !!!!
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Yishtar Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So beautifull :huggle:
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somnalus Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012
you need a hug :(
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Pandela12 Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It is very beautiful. And if expressing yourself through poetry works for you then I suggest to keep doing it.
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SoulEaterXMaka Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Understood completely...
I hope those who are destined to read it read it, and I hope that they're moved by the emotions you've written down. ~<3
Best wishes to you.
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914four Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
“It is better to lose your pride with someone you love rather than to lose that someone you love with your useless pride.” - John Ruskin
Sometimes you gotta put it all out there. I truly hope he or she sees your poem. If they do and aren't moved, then perhaps it was never meant to be.
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CharlieAlphaFoxtrot Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You say this is meant for someone. How can we offer and advice without sounding selfish?
I hope they read this, because from my point of view it is a perfect example of expression.
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Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012
I don't want advice this time Caff. :)
Honestly, I just wrote it because it needed writing.
I didn't submit it to a single group on purpose, or request critique.
Yet it still got to the front page... Sod's law.
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CharlieAlphaFoxtrot Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I know. Just sometimes you have to write it because it has to be said, but everyone ends up seeing it.
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AshitaUchiha Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
I thought this was pretty well written, and it certainly wasn't bad. If I can offer any consructive criticsm, I would say that instead of just describing the emotions, maybe put in some descriptions of physical attributes, and give the reader more of a context for the situation. This kind of falls into the "Show don't tell" argument, and in this poem- you're sort of telling the reader how to feel. Not trying to shit all over your work here. Like I said, I think your level of description is absolutely fine, but I can't help but feel if you shift the focus to whatever made the speaker feel this way, instead of describing only the emotions the speaker is feeling, it would turn a good peom into a really great one.

Of course, that's looking at it like a work of literature and not as something that may or may not be incredibly personal, even though those two things are completely capable of intersecting. (I mean, like, I'm giving you something of a literary cricism right now.) So, if this was written just to out some emotions and not as anything all to serious in terms of all that literary junk, then please feel free to disregard what I just said, as it's only an opinion from a fellow writer.

Keep writing! And have a nice day!
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Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012
I wrote it for pure emotions.
If you notice, on my other works I request critique.
This one I did not. It's also in no groups.
And yet got to the front page... Sod's law.
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AshitaUchiha Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012
Well, hey congrats anyway. And you'll have to forgive me for not being familiar with your other works.
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Nisakine Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
I understand.
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xj4966 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
This is exactly what I'm feeling right now.
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MrCoolOrange Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This was really great and i have been feeling like this to. Horrible to feel but are we ever gonna feel better again?
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Sarahmint Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
mesmerizing
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TheAwsomeOpossum Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
Wow, just a beautiful peace of poetry. So many possible meanings, as it should be. That's how poetry speaks.
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jnsucker12 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
"it was written for the damned"

Well, I didn't get it till you said that.

You know, it's said in the bible that those that weep are blessed (or will be blessed), so we'll see.
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Deviouslouis Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Student General Artist
i get this feeling to sometimes, and this is a very deep poem
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SakyoDawnii Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I get this feeling. I hate it. Good poem...
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Thishumanbeing Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Depressing for sure, however very touching as well. You're never alone man. Whenever I feel sad or really depressed, I just grab my blanket some cracker with milk and I watch a funny comedy. You should try it too. Beautiful poem. Hang in there!
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ScreamerYeti Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Dude! Respect, you are never alone man
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shiningblackwolf Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Sad, but absolutely amazing too. I love it.
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