Like an angel's footfalls, tapping on the rooftops, The gentle patter of the rain, I listen to it lain in bed. It sends me to sleep, as I wonder if it ever stops, Then I fall prey, to all the things that sleep in my head.
Those angels that I so fear, land on the rooftops, Laughing with malice, as they see that I am in bed. As they laugh at my sleeping form, my heart stops, As I wake, I realise that it was all just in my head.
I listen to the rain, as it falls on these rooftops, I sigh and begin to relax, as I lay back down in bed. That gentle rain sends me to sleep again, it never stops, Once again, I fall prey to the things that lurk in my head.
A cycle of nightmares, thanks to the rain on the rooftops, But at least I am asleep for once, as I am lain in my bed. Rain lulls me asleep to nightmares, the cycle never stops, I will always just fall prey, to the things that are in my head.
This is one of the better free-verse pieces I have read. The sentences are smooth and the idea is strong. Though this poem is meerly lacking rhythm, you substitute that device seemingly well with vivid details and originality. Your use of descriptive words gives the poem a unique and enticing quality that keeps the reader's attention til' the very last word. The length of each verse cooperates well with the size of each stanza to ensure to keep any viewer on their toes. You are well on your way to being a skilled poet. Keep up the good work, and I can't wait to read another one of your works~
This is an interesting piece. I like it. But it feels (to me) like it's not just about rain/ nightmares. I don't know why... Maybe I'm overthinking or something...I don't know...Sorry about the random train of thought. Anyway... Overall great piece. I enjoyed reading it.
I'm scared of angels. I have my own reasons. My own nightmares. Look at "The Ritual" in my gallery? It could explain why. I don't actually believe that the devil is a force for good though. I just think he is the only one who cares to look after us. Because well, if we die before we sin, he doesn't win, so he keeps us alive to make sure we do
And if you go in my gallery, on the left there's my "Reaper series." Based on a series of dreams I had really, as are a few others. And one I never quite really get around to writing, but really need to. Read from Fallen (on the far right I think?) and onwards ^^"
I think I'll get around to checking them out... and I apologize once again for any spelling mistakes I've made in the past couple of messages. (I'm apologizing because spelling mistakes bother me.. especially when I'm the one who makes them(.
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